please review my landing page

[kayd005]

Hello every one

i created a landing page and i would like to get your reviews before i get some traffic

here is my landing page

[URLnf="http://mi40x.feelawesomeness.com/"]click here[/URLnf]


waiting your respond

 

[Nytshade]

Hey Mohamed, I just checked your landing page. First thing I realized is that when I have adblock switched on it removes your background image, I had to switch it off and I don't think any of your visitors who has adblock will do the same.

Keep the optin form in the center not on the right hand side. Instead of using "video reveals" I always use "Free Video Reveals", people love free stuff

The headline is really good and explains all the benefits and how long it will take but maybe you might want to add the word "Free".

Instead of saying enter your email to watch, use "enter your best email below and I'll send you the video..." or something similar to that. The point here is to let them know that you need their email so that you can send them the video. Your current optin form will leave the visitor wondering why you need their email.

And I'm not sure if people who're into body building are familiar with the word "report", I think ebook or PDF will work well.

Even the words "$47 valued" seems like you're going to sell it to them so I would remove that.

Hope that helps

 

[elcidofaguy]

Greetings kayd005,

I would add privacy, terms and disclosure links at the footer with adding these very important pages... If you decide to use the paid ads route - most platforms will require this...

I'm not to sure about the background image lol... I would change it... You might be better off with a plain white or black background with the opt-in moved to the centre... It may be a cultural thing but here in the UK, most blokes would laugh at an image of a body builder flexing his stuff, with obvious use of steroids... I've seen quite a few similar ads on FB and all of them get negative comments, especially relating to unreal expectations... You already have an image within the optin box - so that in my opinion is enough...

In addition the optin box being a shade related to pink doesn't work well... Its not a macho colour for this niche.... I would change that too...

Hope that helps...

Best Regards,

Sid

EDIT: I also note that you have a screen capture of a Youtube video... So its obvious I can go there and find it... I would remove the obvious link that the video is on Youtube... Perhaps just crop it so that the bottom part is removed...

 

[SarahR]

Good but just one thing: The 'free video reveals' portion overlaps and does not fit 100% of the screen. Can you lay it out properly or put on the center instead of the right side, just like what Nytshade said?

 

[mido]

For me, this looks very "spammy". I would never lick on anything on a landing page like this.

The contrast is bad for the text and the background in the footer. Skip the background image - it only slows the web page down and does not look like anything that belongs to 2015. Don't like the letters in caps.

 

[ron13315]

Not good! you should make it looks clean. The highlighted words should have padding and margins for all your elements. Also the face of the man on your background should be visible.

 

[MightWeb]

You need to work on the typography and color use on this site. It's currently extremely sharp, the colors are not working properly against your background, and the choice of font is not too great.
Keep in mind that it will be hard to do if you wish to use a background image like that - background images should not disturb your content in any way, and this one definitely does. I'd alter that first, then adjust the box to a more clean color, install a different font for increased readability, try to lower the use of different font colors and instead play around with font weight.

Good luck!

 

[nimimca]

Font and space between lines are not good, you need to expand a title on lines
Site looks good but responsive design it not perfect when re size into mobile device

 

[iTeachBlogging]

I thought that I had somehow got it wrong and clicked on a piece of spam. To be fair, I am not your audience but I believe that there has to be a better way.

 

[kayd005]

Thank you very much all of you iTeachBlogging how spammy?

 

[iTeachBlogging]

Well until I read more of the post here, I thought that I was looking at the wrong page. However, do consider your audience. In other words, have you looked at competitor landing pages? I may be off base here.

 

[Hyuga]

Looks simple and clean for me, I kinda like it

 

[Chloe]

I too found it a bit "spammy" after I turned off Adblock. With Adblock on- it looks a little unfinished. I don't know much about web-design so I can't really give any suggestions, but thats what it looks like to me.

 

[elcidofaguy]

The OP has completely changed the original landing page and further it has nothing to do with the original review. Hence this thread is closed.